School Project

[csemo]

A well written and lively piece that should be of help to the "green as grass" newbie to re-enacting. Your stating that you are relatively new to it yourself put me at ease while I read. I felt like I could make a mistake here and there without feeling out of step, yet your experiences are a valuable lesson for an up and coming enthusiast. Speaking as a non re-enactor, I would be more relaxed at my first event after reading your article. Well done and keep at it. You will do well not only in the hobby but in writing as well!

Thank you very much! that means a lot.

 

[csemo]

Well written. A few minor recommendations.

-Many of us know the term "period correct" but your readers who are new or never been in the hobby may not understand the significance of the term. I would explain it. I scanned the paper quickly as it is late so if you did explain it...never mind.

-I believe you say the P-58 Enfield. I think you mean the P-53 Enfield.

-A cook-off? Remember your reader may not be familiar with firearms or black powder intricacies.

-Why should a beginner be in the front rank? I would explain the two lines of infantry formation and the issue of recruits not having their gun in the right place for the front rank soldier.

If at all possible I would use some original pictures to illustrate how the gear looked and was worn to further your worded description.

I hope these recommendations help and are meant in a constructive way with the up most respect sir. Again, it is a well written document. Bully for you and good luck!

I had planned to add a vocab section but ran out of time, I will attach that to the end when I get a chance.

I did mean the 53, Thank you for catching that

Adding a vocab section

Will further explain the safety issues regarding placement and formation

I do plan to add illustrations but I will have to sufficiently bribe my more artsy friends first.

Thanks for the response, changes will be added

 

[Mike Serpa]

I wouldn't open with, "I'll start off by stating I am not an expert in reenacting, ..." The not is way too negative and the rest makes me wonder if I should read more. This whole first part of your sentence should be deleted. Your honesty is honorable but not needed in this instance.

 

[csemo]

I think I'm pretty similar in age to you since I'm 16- since I'm young, seems like I'm kind of the target audience and I really enjoyed that- even though I'm not a re-enactor and can't give you any practical help or advice. It's interesting and really accessible too, adored the additional note section at the end, which made it personal and you don't feel talked down to or anything, it's a little like having a good friend walk you through it because of the conversational style of the piece. I also could see my friends- who aren't as interested in this period of history- reading that and understanding it. Hope you get an A on your manual.

Yes you are, I'm currently 17. I was 16 when I first started reenacting. You are exactly my target audience I was going for, thanks for reading